Wednesday, March 31, 2010

Adverb City

Adverbs are good words, but they can be quite unimaginative. Use 'em sparingly! More active verbs and/or phrases can be substituted. Consider these examples:
Okay: They walked along the riverside, talking cheerfully until the sun went down.
More Interesting: They walked along the riverside, chattering like squirrels on caffeine until the sun went down.
Okay: "Get out of my room!" she said angrily.
More Interesting: "Get out of my room!" she yelled, shaking her fist in his face.
Okay: Jim looked curiously into the box, wondering what was inside.
More Interesting: Jim peered into the box. What was inside?
Okay: She followed her mother hesitantly into the dining room, fearful of a scolding.
More Interesting: She followed her mother into the dining room, her shoes dragging across the carpet. Oh, dear. If her mother scolded her again, she'd burst into tears for sure....

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